Here's his reply:
Dear Beh, I went through both drafts. Good. Structurally, the ideas presented connect with each other. To give you an example of finetuning, I have corrected the first two pages of the first draft sent earlier. I am attaching the file. Go through and take care of language slips, grammar and stylistics (that is italicising, single quote etc.,) carefully. Go through the draft once again, edit it and clean it up, that is my first suggestion.
Secondly, what is permissible goes and what is not the focus goes away. For instance, in the introductory paragraph of chap 1 you mention national enunciation. Such usages may warrant a different usage of enunciation (benveniste's) which is not attempted here. Hence you can take away enunciation from your usage.
Do you want to see me today (sunday) or monday? If you want to see me today, may be we go online in the evening after 7pm. if you want me to meet tomorrow, you can see me before my class (10 to 12) at 9.30 am in my office or after 12.15.
Good effort with a focus. Scope for further research.
Hopefully everything goes well, and I shall be a really happy lad by tomorrow!!